The average standard of people health is likely to be lower in the future than it now.What extend do you agree or disagree?
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world
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the life
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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assistance
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consequently
general health
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surveillance
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days society
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world is putting a huge amount of investment on public health
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establishing new infrastracture
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infrastructure
out break
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outbreak
moreover
preventive programes
including immunization and vaccination which are really effective to reduce Correct your spelling
programmes
programs
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number
finally
a joint effort from world nations also
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health
.supporting countries each other from producing medicines to fighting against communicable diseases to financial suppoters to poor countries Above all
preparing every human to handle health
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opinions
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
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