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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Recently, there have been some kind of ways to help
students
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 know more about the outside world, one of them is international
student
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exchange
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. Some teachers believe
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 will be a good chance for all teenage school
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. In my opinion, I think
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 kind of way will have more benefits rather than disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will give some reasons and a few realistic examples from my own experience.
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 with, there is one main reason that teachers want
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 to go out for international
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.
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 assumption comes from a prediction that each
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 having an opportunity to go overseas like
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 will not only gain more knowledge but
also
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 open eyes widely to see what the outside world looks like. From that experience, those
students
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 will need to adapt and interact with a perfectly new culture which helps them to be independent on their own which is one of the factors needed in each person.
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, from that situation being
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, they will have a chance to be more mature and deal with every problem on their own. From those points, many teachers are convinced that international
exchange
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 is needed for each
student
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. Cite an example, that's my sister, who is now a type of
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student
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, after the first month was quite rough, she was gradually getting over it, and becoming quite grown up after all, from a crying girl, she now has turned into a mature girl who can deal with a lot of problems on her own.
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, there are still some drawbacks to
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 kind of stuff which may be really hard at the initial
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, because these
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 are familiar with living close to family, so living far away from their parents sounds really difficult.
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, when starting to live in a new environment, there are so many things to adapt
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 as foods, drinks, or culture, which may take
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 to get over.
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, the very first
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, those
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students
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 will feel alone when they have to live on their own and get everything done by themself.
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, these problems need a given
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 to deal with, especially since these will be fundamental keys to help them mature and become an independent person. In conclusion, international
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students
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 may get a lot of benefits from
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,
while
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 gradually they have a chance to know about what the outside world looks like and learn how to become independent from their family which may outweigh the problems
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 as being lonely, finding hard to live far away from their home. these drawbacks will be tackled soon on their own.

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Structure
Continue to structure your essays with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Your structure allows readers to follow your argumentation smoothly.
Linking
To enhance coherence, try using a wider variety of linking phrases. This will help to connect ideas more smoothly within and between paragraphs.
Examples
Supporting your ideas with examples is excellent. Including more detailed examples or expanding on how these examples relate to your main points could make your argument even stronger.
Sentence Variety
Review and diversify your sentence structures. While your essay is well-written, varying sentence structure can enhance readability and engagement.
Use of Examples
Effectively uses a personal example to support your argument, enhancing credibility and relatability.
Understanding
Demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and provides a balanced view, considering both advantages and disadvantages.
Logical Flow
Good logical flow from introduction through to conclusion, making your essay coherent and cohesive.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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