Write about the following topic. Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Recently, there have been some kind of ways to help
students
know more about the outside world, one of them is international student
exchange
. Some teachers believe this
will be a good chance for all teenage school students
. In my opinion, I think this
kind of way will have more benefits rather than disadvantages. In this
essay, I will give some reasons and a few realistic examples from my own experience.
To begin
with, there is one main reason that teachers want students
to go out for international exchange
. This
assumption comes from a prediction that each student
having an opportunity to go overseas like this
will not only gain more knowledge but also
open eyes widely to see what the outside world looks like. From that experience, those students
will need to adapt and interact with a perfectly new culture which helps them to be independent on their own which is one of the factors needed in each person. As a result
, from that situation being independent
, they will have a chance to be more mature and deal with every problem on their own. From those points, many teachers are convinced that international Replace the word
independence
exchange
is needed for each student
. Cite an example, that's my sister, who is now a type of exchange
student
, after the first month was quite rough, she was gradually getting over it, and becoming quite grown up after all, from a crying girl, she now has turned into a mature girl who can deal with a lot of problems on her own.
On the other hand
, there are still some drawbacks to this
kind of stuff which may be really hard at the initial time
, because these students
are familiar with living close to family, so living far away from their parents sounds really difficult. Besides
, when starting to live in a new environment, there are so many things to adapt such
as foods, drinks, or culture, which may take time
to get over. Furthermore
, the very first time
, those exchange
students
will feel alone when they have to live on their own and get everything done by themself. However
, these problems need a given time
to deal with, especially since these will be fundamental keys to help them mature and become an independent person.
In conclusion, international exchange
students
may get a lot of benefits from this
, while
gradually they have a chance to know about what the outside world looks like and learn how to become independent from their family which may outweigh the problems such
as being lonely, finding hard to live far away from their home. these drawbacks will be tackled soon on their own.Submitted by nguyenhuyhoa1506 on
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