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MORE AND MORE YOUNG PEOPLE ARE USING DRUG AND ALCOHAL AND AS A RESULT, BREAKING A LAW. WHAT ARE CAUSES OF THIS PROBLEM WHAT ARE THE SOME POSSIBLE SOLLUTIONS.

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Drug
 and
alcohol
 addiction have become a serious problem amid
people
Suggestion
the people
. It has spoiled dream and aspirations of thousands of families. The fascinating story of the addicts is that once they accustomed to heinous habit, they cannot get rid of it regardless how they endeavour themselves. Especially, youth are used to
drug
 abuse in our society. So, it is crucial to find the reasons behind their deadly habits. Very thoughtful decisions should be taken to help the youngsters to fight the
drug
 abusing problems.
First
 and top most reason of
this
 issue is the peer- pressure. As young people hang out
most time
Suggestion
more time
 with their friends and some may be
drug
 abusers, who compel them to experience
alcohol
 and sedatives for once.
Secondly
, some advertisements and films that show using
drug
Suggestion
drugs
 in
seductive manner
Suggestion
a seductive manner
. The people who are watching them have the habit of imitating whatever their best actors or prominent personalities are
perform
Suggestion
performed
performing
, they no longer keep away themselves doing drugs. In
long run
Suggestion
the long run
,
this
 little curiosity
guides
Suggestion
guide
 them to be notorious
drug
 abusers.
Besides
this
, family and psychological problems
also
 sometimes lead the young people to try drugs. Wiping out drugs and alcoholism from society appears to be complicated but not
insurmountable
Suggestion
Insurmountable
. Educational programmes should be organised in schools and colleges so that people would be aware about the drawbacks of taking drugs. Rehabilitations centres and sports facilities ought to be provided to youngsters so they never lag behind the
drug
 and sedatives. Banning advertisements of
alcohol
 will lead to people drinking less
alcohol
. To conclude that
drug
 abuse and alcoholism are the evil of family, society and nation. The responsible bureaucrats and governments should take
to
being one more than one
two
 very responsible steps to reduce
drug
 problems.
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