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Nowadays parents are sending their children on trips abroad for educational purposes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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At present days,
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 in abroad has become a trend. Because, parents are highly encouraged to send their children to higher
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 to any reputed institute by which they gain international exposure and confidence. But the disadvantage of
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 fact is that
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 trips are very expensive and
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 can cause of a security threat. Going abroad for educational purpose has lots of advantages. By doing
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 the young generation can meet with new peoples and new cultures. They can learn to survive in
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 kind of difficult situation where things are not available now and
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. It enhances their confidence. Meeting new people, they can get more friend and know new people as well as it grows their communication skills. When someone is about to fall in any danger or any critical situation they learn to handle
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.
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 makes them to become an innovator.
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 student who has a degree from any reputed international university can get a good job easily.
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 the main reason that encourage students along with their parents to pursue higher
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 in foreign countries.
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,
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 in abroad sometimes is very expensive to bear for any parents. Many parents forced to take a loan for going their children to any university in overseas. In other word, some student cannot handle the foreign issues. Sometimes an overseas school trip for children is often causing a security threat. The student often got engaged with the crime. The important thing is, many students are highly encouraged to stay over there forever and never come back to their homeland.
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, in Bangladesh, every year there are many university’s students who go to abroad for higher
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 and never come back.
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 is a global lose for any country. To conclude, I will say that there are lots of advantages to
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 abroad, but after completing
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 students should have to come back to their own country and apply all methodologies these they learnt from abroad to grow their own country’s status.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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