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Both poor and rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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In today's modern era, tertiary
education
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 is becoming increasingly vital. Some people believe, higher
education
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 is becoming inaccessible for both privileged and underprivileged segments of the society.
This
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 essay will discuss why I am in complete agreement with the said statement in depth.
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, since most of the higher
education
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 institutes are based in the metropolitan areas, people living in the rural areas find them difficult to access. Even after getting admission, the financially turbulent ones have to live in hostels and have to bear extra costs which is highly inconvenient for any individual. Clearly, the main cause of difficulty of accessibility is the high concentration of universities in urban areas.
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, in some regions of the world, the number of universities is extremely low with respect to the populations of those areas.
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 of
this
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 problem, admission into these institutions is getting extremely difficult. The students are applying in these seminaries in massive numbers, but the available quota of seats is low.
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, my niece, being a potential medical student is struggling to take admission into a medical college because the number of allocated seats is 6000 and the number of applicants who have applied is 65000 in the Punjab province, Pakistan. Naturally, even if one can bear the expenses, the entry
in
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into
 these institutions is getting enormously tedious.
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, some people argue that access to
the higher
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higher
education
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 is not a problem anymore since the introduction of internet-based learning. Nowadays, students can get
education
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 via computers while staying at home rather than getting on-campus
education
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.
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, numerous accredited universities in Australia have started offering online learning which has certainly reduced some challenges faced by the students.
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, with the advancement
in
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of
 travelling, students can travel to various cities and countries with a greater convenience than ever before. For exemplification, with cars, trains and
aero planes
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
aeroplanes
 functioning at greater speeds, travelling to the campuses have become easier than ever before. In conclusion,
this
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 essay discussed the challenges of getting higher
education
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for both
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for, both
 financially stable and unstable classes and presented views from
other side
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the other side
 of the picture as well. In my opinion, I entirely agree that
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the difficulty
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availability
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availing
 of institutes providing higher
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 is on the rise and both deprived and the opulent classes are facing hard times. The problem seems to prevail until the government changes their priorities and invest in establishing more universities in small cities as well.

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