In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?

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More and more sports players are using drugs for improving their performance in many sports competitions.

This

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essay suggests the main reason for

this

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is players wants to be

excel

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excelling

excelled

in all competitions, and the most viable solution to tackle

this

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problem is educating

atlets

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

outlets

regarding the

sideeffects

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side effects

such

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drugs.

Sportspersons

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are using illegal drugs mainly to win the

competion

a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers

competition

. These drugs stimulate certain hormones in the body, as well as,

strenghten

make strong or stronger

strengthen

muscles, and gives an extra

engery

any physical damage to the body caused by violence or accident or fracture etc.

injury

to the players, which helps them to work more than usual.

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, the

athlets

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

outlets

athlete

will be able to win the competitions by breaking old records, and become more famous.

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, John Brittas, a world famous

athletic coach

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athlete, coach

athlete coach

suggested that the performance of an

athlet

a person trained to compete in sports

athlete

can be doubled by inducing

stimulationg

rousing or quickening activity or the senses

stimulating

stimulation

drugs in certain dose. Educating the

athlets

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

athlete

abouts

(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct

about

the ill-effects of drugs is the best solution to tackle

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problem.

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, these drugs will improve the

atheletic

relating to or befitting athletics or athletes

athletic

performance, it

have

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has

life-

treathening

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sideeffects

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side effects

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as cancer and heart diseases, so, make the

athlets

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

athlete's

athlete

aware about the complications which is caused by

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drugs. Right education will make the player give more importance to health rather than fame and money. For instant,

recent study

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a recent study

recent studies

conducted in Manipal Univesity in India found that 87% of young

athlets

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

have

tendency

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a tendency

to use stimulating drugs as they do not know the ill-effects of

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drugs and they thought that it is

the short

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the shortest

way to achieve success

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In conclusion, the main reason for the over usage of stimulating drugs sports players is to be

win

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won

in all competitions and the most suitable way to overcome

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crisis is proper health

eduaction

the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill

education

athlets

an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition

athletics

athletes

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Performance-enhancing drugs (PEDs)
Doping
Anti-doping regulations
Detection methods
Ban substances
Ethical issues
Health risks
Fair play
Sportsmanship
Stakes
Pressure to succeed
Enforcement
Awareness programs
Testing frequency
Entourage
Science advancement
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