Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots inn their own country first, before traveling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

In recent times,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
abroad has sparked great debates about whether people should travel to other countries or should visit local attractions before that.
Although
several tourists feel that we should support domestic travel in order to decide the
next
targets locating in remote countries, I do believe that it is better for us to instantaneously visit foreign tourist spots because each place has its own signature. On one hand, local travelling lets us to establish a benchmark which is essential for selecting our
next
travelling destinations.
This
is because we are able to choose places that totally different from local places in order to gain undiscovered experiences.
In addition
, we are not going to waste our valuable time in unexciting places.
For example
, a latest research found that about 40% of natural tourist attractions around the world are classified as
environment
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an environment
that can be seen in Thailand.
However
, I do not agree with
this
idea since every attraction has its
unique
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uniqueness
.
On the other hand
, some tourist
feel
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feels
that international
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
provides more distinct experiences. A strong reason for
this
is that our life is
limit
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limited
;
furthermore
, each oversea place provides us different cultural
experience
.
For example
, a study revealed that professional
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
travels
travelling
averagely
been to 40 places.
Consequently
, I agree that we should not
spent
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spend
our time with merely new
experience
from local places;
moreover
, we should spend our limited time properly for both totally new and specific cultural
experience
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experiences
by going to other countries. In conclusion, even if some people encourage us to
firstly
choose local attraction, I do believe that travelling abroad provide us more valuable
experience
in limited lifetime.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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