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Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Films in theatres and web series over the internet has become a trend and a major factor in entertainment of the masses. People tend to rely on these sources of entertainment over the weekends after a hectic work week. In my opinion, watching cinema is definitely not a loss of
time but
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time, but
 the only major mode of recreation. One way of looking at it is that people follow their
movie
 actors and actresses who are called
movie
 buffs.
For instance
, they stay tuned into the
internet following their
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internet, following their
 blogs for latest
movie
 updates. As the
movie
 gets released, they religiously book tickets and end up in the
movie
 hall devoting three hours
to
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of
 pure entertainment. Another way of looking at it is that it acts as a stress buster. After an entire long week of
work
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working
 people's minds demand an escape from the gruelling reality of everyday work tensions of life. I would like to mention an example of my own family where my
father
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father's
 books
movie
 tickets
of
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for
 any latest upcoming
movie
 having a crisp storyline. We as a family love thriller, suspense and action flicks.
Lastly
, there are films which often convey a meaningful message to the large audience it may attract. Recently, a
movie
 named '
judgemental
depending on judgment
judgmental
hai
kya
' was released which was based on how mentally challenged people are treated by the Indian society. There were ways showcased to the audience in order to treat them right and as
family
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a family
. It was truly an eye opener. Conclusively, watching films
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may be
 a waste of time for some, but I firmly believe that movies have become an integral part of people's lives influencing it in every possible way and changing their lives forever.
Submitted by Shreyans Aery on

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