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Some people believe that research into family history is useful for the next generations, while others claim that present and future are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 fast-paced environment, it is quite common that the youngsters do not care about their
ancestory
the descendants of one individual
ancestry
ancestors
ancestor
. Some people argue that knowing one's family past in important, while others believe that the present and
future
 situations are the main aspects to focus on.
This
 essay discusses these two different viewpoints in detail, before concluding to an opinion. There are many benefits
in
Suggestion
of
 understanding the history of a family, the most pivotal one being gaining knowledge about the ancestors. By learning about the hardships, their parents and grandparents had to face to nurture a good culture throughout the generations, children can be proud of themselves to be a part of
such
 family.
Secondly
, natives who
belongs
Suggestion
belong
 to elitist families, with a good cultural heritage, are the most respected among other countrymen.
For example
, people belong to ancient ruling families in some countries, always get good respect from other inhabitants of the
society
, all thanks to their forefathers.
On the other hand
, some communities, where people are least bothered about the past,
concentrate
Suggestion
concentrates
 only on the present situation to engender their offspring.
For example
, in South India, there were some tribes, who were not allowed to have
academic education
Suggestion
an academic education
, because of caste discrimination in the early period. But
new generation
Suggestion
the new generation
a new generation
 from
such
 civilization crave for good education and progression in their life, rather than following the same old culture of their families. It is irrefutable fact that education reforms the
society
.
In addition
 to that, technology is so advanced in modern
society
, that they are keener into the
future
,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 past. Most of us are living in an egalitarian
society
; unlike past century, now there is no differentiation among citizens. In conclusion, even though, it is a good thing to learn about our past and pass it to the
future
 generations, living in the present and focus on
future
Suggestion
the future
 is more important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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