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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The specified topic is very pertinent as the same is being discussed
at
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in
 multiple global forums. In
this
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 contemporary era,
technology
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 is progressing at an exponential pace. The
last
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 two
decade
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decades
 have seen enormous changes in the way people
lives
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live
 with many advances in
this
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technology
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 field. Numerous mortals think that life was better in past
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 when
technology
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 was simpler while
other
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others
 don'
t
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 agree with
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.
Technology
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 has revolutionised every aspect of life there are many advantages of
technology
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 is discussed in upcoming paragraph. To commence with
,
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,
in
today
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today's
 hectic schedule people don'
t
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 have enough
time
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 to meet their
beloved but
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beloved, but
 with the help of
technology
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,
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,
a person can easily communicate and connect with the world anytime
,
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,
anywhere.
Technology
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 has made life very easy as well as it consumes less
time
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.
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,
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,
with
technology
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 people
work
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 as well as no need to commute for sending
letter
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letters
 or any other
work
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.
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, a person
gain
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gains
 any information related any field
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of
 internet and daily news about what is going on in the world.
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,
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,
 the effects of
this
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technology
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 have not all been beneficial
.
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.
 Mortals are so dependent on
technology
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 nowadays. They don'
t
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 like to do physical
work
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 as well as don'
t
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 use traditional ways to
work
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.
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 will put negative impact on upcoming generation. People are so addicted to social networking they don'
t
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 like to spend
time
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 with their family
as a result
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 the stress is increasing day-by-day. Children are the most affected by the
technology
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 and harm their health. Apart from
this
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,
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,
it is a major issue of increasing environmental problems. Taking everything into account, in the light of aforementioned arguments. It is believed that
technology
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provide
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provides
ease
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easy
 and comfortable if it is used in limit so that it don'
t
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 affect upcoming generation.
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