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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

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Family
business
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involve
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involves
 many combinations of relationships
such
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 as parent-child, husband-wife, siblings,
also
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 extended family members could be involved in board.
This
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 trend has many benefits,
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 it has some detriments attached with it. On the
one
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hand involving
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hand, involving
 relatives in
business
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 at different levels has many advantages. The most important
one
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 is that family members are generally more dedicated to the common goals and they do not hesitate to sacrifice for achievement of the
company
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 targets.
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, involvement of closed
one
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 in the
business
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 creates grounded and firm foundation for the
company
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,
also
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 their presence around provides support, trust and comfort.
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, people involved in the
business
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 know the consequences of their action on the
business
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 if they or their relatives own it and so they would choose themselves
for
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to
 cut off in case of
recession
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a recession
.
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, families are more lenient and forgiving when it comes to working hours, schedules and even mistakes. When family is involved, there is a leeway to work flexible or part time which in turn allow taking care of children, parents and other family members.
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,
researches
a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
researchers
 have proved that people working in their own office or workshop are more liberal about the work.
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, kinsmen in
company
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 create a flexible environment with loyalty.
On the other hand
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, there are some challenges to run
business
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in
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with
 family. The biggest difficulty is
issue
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an issue
the issue
 regarding succession which might
causes
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cause
 conflicts in the relationship involved.
This
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 might occur if the older generation does not permit the young generation the needed room to develop and grow.
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, if the elders of the family do not allow youngsters to take risks, they would never understand how to
deal an emergency
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deal with an emergency
.
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,
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business owner
Suggestion
a business owner
the business owner
business owners
 might prefer a relative for the job even though he or she does not have adequate skills for the position.
This
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 can deteriorate the
business
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, and cause harmful ripples among the employees working hard to secure higher position.
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, no
one
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 denies that efficient employees would leave the
company
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 if they feel any kind of partiality.
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, inappropriate referral without ability and clashes could affect the trade adversely. To conclude, family
business
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 would be beneficial in terms of honesty, devotion and liberty,
although
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 issues with heredity and favouritism can bring gloomy effects on the environment of the firm.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • loyalty
  • trust
  • communication
  • generational knowledge
  • long-term outlook
  • family traditions
  • stability
  • cost-effective
  • flexible payment arrangements
  • conflict
  • tensions
  • roles
  • diversity
  • external perspectives
  • innovation
  • adaptation
  • succession planning
  • instability
  • leadership
  • ownership
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