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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are reasons for this and how could the problem be solved?

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Teachers play a significant role in every ones life,
they
of them or themselves
their
constanty
unvarying in nature
constant
constantly
 support and teach people with the knowledge they have. They are the building blocks
of
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for
 children as they tend to grow.
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, In the modern society teachers are getting reduced due to
variable
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varied
varying
 reasons, resulting a huge impact on society. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the main reasons why less people are showing interest
on
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in
this
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 profession and challenges to overcome the issue.
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 and important reason why teaching is ignored is constant
work
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 pressure and long working hours. Teachers often
work
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 till evenings teaching and controlling children in schools and they do not get enough time to spend with their family.
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, private school teachers
attent
be present at (meetings, church services, university), etc.
attend
 classes one after the other without a break in between.
School administration
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The school administration
 should consider their
work
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 and should have to allocate periods
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 that they get enough time to relax.
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, they are paid very low compared to other professions.
Lets
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Let's
 take India, where
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a
 software engineer earns four times the amount earned by secondary staff. Teachers have huge respect in the world for their determination and contribution to
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, and
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 they should be paid considering their importance.
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, many people are going to
work
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on
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in
 the field they have studied. What I mean by
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 is everyone looks for a job
that is
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 related to their field of study ignoring fields like teaching and law. Most of the students when they
are asked
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ask
 about their career, they even does not think about becoming a good teacher to pupils. Governments should encourage people to
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 profession by increasing giving
tranings
activity leading to skilled behavior
trainings
 to youth and ensuring their career. All things considered, It is very difficult to teach people about skills with
continous
continuing in time or space without interruption
continuous
 learning. Teachers and books are always good
resorces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 for children to increase their ability. In my opinion, there are many challenges like stress due to working hours and low
payroll which
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payroll, which
 should be encountered by monitoring schools and encouraging people to opt
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work
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