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Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climates. Discuss both views and explain which climate you prefer.

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Different seasons bring different experiences and one
such
 experience is
change
Suggestion
a change
the change
 in
climate
. For centuries people have been debating on which
climate
 is better to live in, hot or cold? While a section of society prefers hot, there are many others who adore the cold
weather
.
This
 essay will discuss why it living in cold conditions is much more fun when compared to living in hot
climate
. Just like other preferences, people have their say when it comes to
weather
. People who like to live in countries with hot
climate
 argue that it is the best kind of
climate
. Especially, because they have year round access to swimming pools and water sports.
Moreover
, they can indulge in outdoor activities as
days
Suggestion
the days
 are longer.
For instance
, the population of Dallas more sun time when compared to people living in Boston
thus
 enabling them to be outdoors for much longer. For these reasons, many support the notion that lifestyle of hot places and countries.
Conversely
, many people like living in the cold
climate
. People living in cold
weather
 places love the fact that they do not have to deal with sweat all the time even while performing mundane tasks.
Also
, it is easier to keep food
items fresh
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items, fresh
 for
long
Suggestion
longer
 in colder
weather
. Various studies from Harvard University have proved that food items and produce does stay fresh longer and requires less refrigeration. Overall, cold
climate
 nations have a definite advantage when it comes to preserving food. To conclude,
weather
 is a very subject topic.
This
 essay discussed
why despite
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why, despite
 having more sun time, colder nations are much more fun as they allow people to be free from sweat. Personally, I prefer living in cold
weather
 much more because one can easily play outdoors without having to worry about dehydration and replenishing the fluids.
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