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The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is indeed an inevitable truth that the forthcoming time is totally depends on the young generation of a nation
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 So that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am completely agree
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have completely agreed
completely agree
 with
this
 statement that
authority
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the authority
authorities
 must lay out money on
youth
 and I will cast light in the following writing
as
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As
 we know that
this
 is a modern and technical era and it will be increased in the predictable time
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In addition
 to
this
,
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,
 the level of competition is boosting day by day among all countries
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 Like
,
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,
 new innovation and unbelievable discoveries.
This
 is because, it would only possible if a country has
good
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a good education system
education
 system as well as intellectual
youth
. So it becomes the duty of government to give them
good
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better
 facilities
such
 as new technical institutes, college and universities, where they can do experiments for their different study purposes.
For instance
, American
providing
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is providing
 free
education
 to the children's
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,
 so that it is developed nation and
that is
 the
main reason behind of
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main reason behind
 the progress of
this
 country
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
 it is
well known fact
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a well known fact
 that
youth
 have
sharp memory
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a sharp memory
 and they are capable to grasp extreme knowledge because they are mentally and physically
more healthy
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healthier
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Besides
, If proper
education
 facilities would be provided by the authorities,
then
 they can prove themselves as multiple knowledge. In
this
 way
,
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,
 money is the
first
 and foremost need
.
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 To exemplify
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,
 if the regularities spend 10% money on
young generation
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a younger generation
younger generation
 and teenagers, they have more educated and skilled workers. To wrap up
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,
 there is no single conclusion, but a nation should invest
on
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in
proper
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the proper education
education
 of
youth
 to improve their skills.
As a result
 economic level will be inclined automatically

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