In the present era, children are found to have fewer responsibilities than it used to be in the past time. some people consider it as a positive development. However, other see it as a negative trend.

Due to the contemporary lifestyle changes, the level of
headedness
the property of being strong and healthy in constitution
hardiness
has turned far and few when it comes to sharing responsibility among children.Some people believe that shouldering them with responsibilities will contribute positively while others see it negatively.
This
essay intends to delve into considering both the aspects giving my opinions.
To begin
with
,
Accept space
,
life is too short to be equated with excess baggage on the shoulders of
toddler
Suggestion
a toddler
toddlers
. When burdened with too much responsibility, one become
bounded
stick to firmly
bonded
and might not get exposed to the essentials of
development
Suggestion
developing
. To exemplify
,
Accept space
,
there is
time
Suggestion
timing
in the life of a kid when he need to explore his areas of interest and have new experiences. If at that time
,
Accept space
,
he is in ball and chains, he may skip a necessary ingredient
from
Suggestion
of
his
groeth
relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
great
growth
process.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
if set free of obligations, children get much
elbowroom
Suggestion
elbow room
to hit the bullseye in terms of their personal goals
such
as career, finance etc.
For instance
, if in his board exams which are considered as a
corner stone
the fundamental assumptions from which something is begun or developed or calculated or explained
cornerstone
in his
futher
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
career- building, he is given household responsibilities, he might fail to perform well.
However
, being a free bird inculcates self-centric attitude in a
child which
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child, which
may result in diminishing lovable bonds and relationships. For
intance
an occurrence of something
instance
, old age homes are widely penetrating
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
the ignorant attitude of children towards the elders is seen as a root cause. To conclude, some kind of responsibilities need to be given to
children but
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children, but
but burdening them with weary load may affect their growth negatively.

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