Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

For
government
Suggestion
the government
to take care of disadvantaged people
such
as the unemployed and homeless people will help the
community
to be free of
hoodlooms
an aggressive and violent young criminal
hoodlums
. If a youth doesn't have
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
to do he or she may be engaged in criminal activity. Not for
government
to care for them
alone but
Accept comma addition
alone, but
to get them busy by having a vocational
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
for them to train them to do
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of household equipment and office equipments. Doing
this
will make them useful for themselves and the
community
at large. But if they were
left alone being
Suggestion
being left alone
on their own they will become a great problem to the society and
this
will affect the
economical
Suggestion
economic
growth of the
community
due to youthful restiveness. Youth are the leaders of tomorrow so
government
Suggestion
the government
should take good care of them. A
government
that
neglect
Suggestion
neglects
people and concentrate on themselves
this
youth will be problems for their children in the future and will affect the whole
community
at large.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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