Zoos are sometimes necessary but are a poor alternative to the natural environment. Discuss arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos.

To capture wildlife in enclosures for entertainment purposes is something which may have many advantages for the creature
itself but
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itself, but
cannot be compared to the habitat which is not man made but a gift of nature. There could be several advantages
such
as proper healthcare facilities present in a
zoo
which closely monitors the behaviour, reaction and habits of an animal. If any abnormality may occur, immediate action is taken by the supervisors to treat and cure the animal with appropriate antidotes and medicines which
otherwise
may not be the case, say, in a jungle.
Second
, an animal may not starve at any cost in a
zoo
. There are cycles followed according to an animal's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
which tells the
zoo
authorities when food needs to be put into the cage. In
this
way, an animal is kept healthy and active and
also
helps the creature in
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
old age when it is simply not able to walk much and hunt for food for long in a natural environment.
Lastly
, any wild animal kept in a
zoo
be protected from hunters and poachers. These people intend to kill an animal for making money.
For instance
, an elephant's tusks are made up of ivory which has a huge demand in the market. Poachers kill an elephant and remove
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
tusks to make antiques and other valuable items.
On the other hand
, demerits follow
such
as a wild animal is better off in a natural habitat where it is usually born. Keeping it in a
zoo
cage may affect
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
normal behaviour and
hormones which
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hormones, which
in turn can affect
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
health adversely.
For instance
, a Royal Bengal Tiger may not grow at the same rate as it would in a dense forested area of Sunderbans compared to a
zoo
in a city.
Secondly
, there are lots of civil incidents that take place every now and
then
in zoos resulting in loss of body
parts especially
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parts, especially
hands or even loss of life in many cases.
This
happens due to the pure carelessness of people.
For instance
, there was a case of Delhi
zoo
where a man had put his hand inside a Bear's cage to feed him food and resulted in
loss
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the loss
of his right hand's fingers. In conclusion, there may be many benefits of having a wild animal in a
zoo
to keep it healthy and
strong but
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strong, but
the kind of life it lives in a forest cannot be matched with that of a
zoo
because after all, it is the place where it is born.
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Example:

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