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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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There is no denying the fact that the phenomenon of tourists preferring to visit more challenging destinations is ubiquitous across the globe
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 its importance. The majority of folks are in
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 paragraphs advantages and disadvantages of the same will be discussed. Initiating with the benefits of the same the first and foremost key benefit is the opportunity to explore new things, and to experience remarkable situations. people of new generations select difficult travel destinations.
For example
 in Sri Lanka many prefer water rafting and bungee jumping than ever before. In the Sahara and Antarctic, visitors would have the chance to feel extreme ends of environmental temperature. There could be situations of rapid increases in temperature in the desert.
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, situations like sand winds and hot waves
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 could happen. On its darker side, some of the drawbacks which make it problematic are first weather, there's a higher possibility to occur unexpected climate changes. Even though the technology would not be able to cope with the situation.
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 In relation to the Antarctic, sudden oxygen level drops are possible to happen. One classic example is recently one submarine set on a tour to explore the Titanic ship but sadly the submarine Exploded in the ocean. In conclusion to the above statement neither its pros can be neglected nor its cons. It is a mixed bag of positives and negatives. In my
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 the statement should not be underestimated.
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structure
Work on creating a more logically structured argument with clearer paragraphs, each containing one main idea followed by an explanation or example.
introduction/conclusion
Ensure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your thesis, while your conclusion should summarise the main points and restate your position without introducing new information.
examples
Develop your main points more fully with specific and relevant examples to support your argument. Avoid vague statements and strive to illustrate your ideas with clear examples.
task response
Make sure to respond fully to the task by discussing both benefits and disadvantages equally and providing a clear opinion or judgment in your conclusion.
cohesion
Focus on the clarity and the progression of ideas to ensure that the essay is easily understandable and follows a logical sequence.
cohesion
Use cohesive devices appropriately to signal the relationship between ideas and to help the reader follow the argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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