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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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In
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 competitive world, people are migrating from villages to cities for seeking the opportunities and for improving their lifestyle.
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, it is good, but people forget the importance of rural
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. In my opinion, it is good but there should be a proper balance in these areas. And
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, what kind of problems many countries face because of people moving into urban areas.
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, due to moving into the city's population of that city increases, which may lead to major concern.
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 as, increasing the environmental pollution as people coming into cities by their vehicles.
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, in India about 75% of the public living in cities have their personal vehicles which are huge in numbers and is the important factor when it comes to the pollution.
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, people shifting into cities need proper accommodation because of
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 much land has been converted into a humongous building. According to a survey conducted, in many cities approx. 2% of land is remaining, whereas about 98% of land has been used.
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, there are problems occurring cities
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, but there is a large impact on the village
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.
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, in seeking of opportunity people are not aware how important the rural
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 are as more people are trying to go into cities. Because of
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, countries are facing issues regarding food, water, etc.
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, if all the country population will move into the urban
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then
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 there will be no farms which will lead us to no food to eat. So to avoid
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 kind of problems government should encourage people to stay in rural areas.
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, authorities should provide same facilities in rural areas which they provide in urban areas.
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, moving into different
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 is not an issue, until there is balance between these two areas.
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, people and government should work together and develop the rural
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, so that, there should no need for people to move into the urban
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.
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