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Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent, do you agree or disagree

#people #phones #computers #ability #face
I totally agree most of
peaple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
peoples
 bend over their mobile phones and computer all the
time
 for playing, calling scrolling their pages of
face book
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Facebook
facebook
,
twiter
a series of chirps
twitter
,
instegram
 and
also
 for learning a new skills, they are using their devices
instead
 of tutoring face to face with teachers.
sometimes
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Sometimes
 it sounds good in case of that teacher are living away from their countries
ar
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
or
air
 in a remote
areas
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area
 and
trasportation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 will be
difficullt
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
difficulties
difficulty
,
However
,
on the other hand
 it makes strict in relationships
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 between families each other, they choose call
time
 to
time
instead
 of visiting. New generation using mobile phone all the
time which
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time, which
 is very dangerous to their mind and eyes it lead them to some of
diseas
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
, as well it
impact
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impacts
also
 to their mental ability because of there is no movement every choice just
with
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to
 press a
bottom
a round fastener sewn to shirts and coats etc to fit through buttonholes
button
 to do
what ever
one or some or every or all without specification
whatever
 you want
in
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on
 that
devices
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device
. We have to
repleace
substitute a person or thing for (another that is broken or inefficient or lost or no longer working or yielding what is expected)
replace
release
 these devices with some of
funny
Suggestion
the funniest
 things to pay attention our children to protect them.

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  • erosion
  • interpersonal skills
  • overreliance
  • digital communication platforms
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • social bonds
  • enhance
  • bridging long distances
  • fostering connections
  • age groups
  • adept
  • integrating
  • landscape
  • emotional intelligence
  • nuances
  • striking a balance
  • limitations
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