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some people believe that traditional medicines such as herbal medicines or acupuncture are more benefit than modern medicines

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Traditional
medicine
 is growing in popularity and many people are now using methods
such
 as acupuncture and herbal medicines to maintain and strengthen their health. Many of those who have experienced traditional
medicine
 believe that it is more effective than modern
medicine
. I completely disagree with
this points
Suggestion
this point
these points
 Modern
medicine
 has many advantages over traditional medicines.
Firstly
, modern
medicine
 is fast and effective because drugs are designed to treat problems immediately.
On the other hand
, traditional
medicine
 is slow and does not work very well. Medical research shows that headache would go away after an hour from using drugs, while it would take longer hours for patients to use herbal remedies.
In addition
, modern
medicine
 is constantly being developed and improved,
such
 as researching to find a cure for cancer, AIDS or other fatal diseases.
However
, traditional
medicine
 only uses old knowledge and techniques to treat patients.
Furthermore
, it depends on natural ingredients like herbs and other plants that might disappear. Another important point is that modern
medicine
 is strictly controlled by government to ensure high standards or quality. In Vietnam,
for instance
, becoming a doctor or pharmacist, he/she need to study at medical universities at least seven years, whereas, anyone
also
 can open their own traditional
medicine
 clinics. Recent media report that some herbal medicines are ineffective by causing a detrimental impact on individuals using it. To sum up, traditional
medicine
 relies on natural ingredients and does not work for everyone, while modern
medicine
 is fast, safe and constantly renovated.
Thus
, I believe that it is far better to maintain overall health.

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