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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of online education/ e-learning.

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Now 21st century has been the most innovative ages for
online platform
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an online platform
online platforms
. Learning online has been more interesting and fruitful.
However
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, lack of face to face interaction is creating some of severe issue. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss both positive and negative
aspect
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aspects
 of e-learning.
First
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 of all, online education has
broaden
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broadened
 the dimension of
learninf
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
 beyond
limit
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the limit
. Gaining knowledge in old days sitting back in schools has always been boring and ineffective for
understanging
the cognitive condition of someone who understands
understanding
. But now with the
emittion
any strong feeling
emotions
emotion
 of
online technology level
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the online technology level
 of understanding has been increasing as we can learn from different tutors all
aroung
in the area or vicinity
around
 the world as many times if we want.
In addition
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, e-learning has made so possible that we can learn anything
such
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 as
simple task
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a simple task
, cooking to
the most advance
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more advanced
task
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tasks
 about computers.
For instance
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,
udemy
declare to be true or admit the existence or reality or truth of
admit
 one of the largest online courses
platform
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platforms
 where we can find every related courses.
In addition
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, many learning
app
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apps
 like BYJU'S app are helping students
throung
from beginning to end
through
thrown
 online.
Thus
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, we can say that productivity in
edducation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
educational
 has increased with the help of online education.
Conversely
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, today's dynamic world is being more and more
globalized but
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globalized, but
 at the same time unfriendly behaviour seems to be increasing due to less face-
fae
the front of the human head from the forehead to the chin and ear to ear
face
 interaction. As we can learn from home there won't be necessary to gather in class like in schools. That means, there won't be
fase
the front of the human head from the forehead to the chin and ear to ear
face
false
 to face interaction with tutors and friends.
In addition
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, we cannot ask cross question in the middle of lecture as many
student
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students
 will be watching lecture at a time.
For example
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, most of the courses are already made video and will be uploaded in websites and
app
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apps
an app
 where we can't question our misunderstanding and if we can
theh
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 there will be so many
learner
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learners
 in which there will be difficult for tutors to answer them all. In
conclusion, despite of
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conclusion, despite
 all advantages and dis-advantages, e-learning was introduced for
well-beings
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the well-beings
the wellbeing
 of students all
aroung
in the area or vicinity
around
world
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the world
. In spite of some negative impact there are much more positive aspect of e-learning. So, we should consider online education as praise for us.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
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