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Some parents believe that a child should not waste time by reading entertainment books, instead they should spend time to read educational books only. What is your opinion about this.

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Education plays an indispensable role in everyone's life. An individual can acquire education from distinct ways,
such
 as by reading books, newspaper and much more. One of the most controversial issues today leads to that, children should not be allowed to read entertainment books; according to some parents. I am in the favour of
this
 statement. The fact related to
this
 matter will be discussed in upcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with, some people think that if children will read those books
then
 there will be a huge impact on their academic studies.
Consequently
, children can get distracted from their studies and they will gain, fever marks in academics result.
Moreover
, children love to read stuffs which are either any action or dramatic story in the books, they get fascinated towards them and start behaving like them.
Furthermore
, concentration of children can be banished from serious studies which is highly beneficial for them to adapt. Apart from it, children get aggressive when parents not allowed them to read
this
 type of stuff.
For example
, if parents allowed their child to read
such
 books
then
 they get an addicted towards them. Children find these books interesting and when parents ask them to leave,
then
 they get anger which makes parents think to not let them read those books again. In addition to, parents don't want that their child to be stubborn, but when children get attracted to
such
 stuff once it is hard to make them understand that
this
 is not beneficial. To conclude, children are innocent and adapt new things rapidly. So it is the duty of parents to take care of their children that they have acquired the appropriate knowledge which can be helpful for them in the future.
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