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Action movies with spectacular car chases are very popular with young people. It is often said that these sorts of movies lead to increase in car accidents among young drivers as they try to copy what they have seen in films. Do you agree that such movies increase the amount of bad driving? What can be done to encourage young people to drive more safely?

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In
this
 present epoch of materialism and competition,
life
 security is
first
 and foremost possession of every person, but nowadays, youngsters are moving towards reckless and quick driving practices because of
impact
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the impact
 of some dangerous action movies
on
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in
 their mind, which contributes to the rise in road accidents. I completely agree with the above viewpoint and will discuss the causes and measures of
this
 issue in the following segments.
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Accept space
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FACE OF YOUR ESS There is a plethora of reasons for rough driving and the predominant is that
youth
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the youth
 wants to earn not only money after accepting these kinds of challenges but
also
 they want to shine their fame so to have a different attitude due to the effect of present films
in
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on
 television.
Moreover
 (Connecting), nowadays teenagers are following the acts of movie stars not only for their fame, but they
also
 think it would give them pleasure and peace of mind. They have a spirit of competition and always like to defeat other drivers on the road, which causes dangerous
life
-threatening incidents.
For instance
 (EXAMPLE), youngsters want to become like a movie’s hero without taking care of their
life
 and take risk ignoring their parent’s emotions at all. Every cloud has a silver lining (PROVERB). So, there are numerous factors to curb
this
 problem. Primarily, government should put a heavy penalty on
such
 a reckless driver.
Furthermore
, before telecasting and producing
such
 kind of movies,
this
 should be censored by censor Board.
In addition
 to it, there should be an organisation of seminars for the awareness of young ones about the safety of their lives.
Last
 but not least, parents
also
 play an indispensable role, so they should monitor the activities of their offspring and provide them with counselling. In the compendium,
life
 can never be returned back if once lost.
Therefore
, youth should prioritise security during driving practices. So they can enjoy their present and future
life
 with no fear and worry.
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