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Should government make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

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The verdicts of authorities are often debatable.
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 some people argue that lawmakers should be choosing the lifestyle of citizens, others lay stress on personal decision making. Over the
last
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 few decades, owing to technology, lifestyles of people have changed quite dramatically.
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 with, four-wheelers, which once considered to be a luxury are lying as either unsold or their production has come to a halt.
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, every family today has
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 two or more cars, having high brand value, in which they prefer to travel alone rather than commuting by public transport. Owing to these changing trends, pollution levels have been on a steady rise, thereby effecting the lives of masses severely.
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, some spending of government gets diverted towards maintaining the environment which could have been easily allocated to necessary issues like health care and social security.
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, selecting lifestyle by a centralized authority ensures a sense of uniformity and togetherness. It leads to building up of better relations among citizens. To illustrate, European government has made mandatory for all offices to work from eight in the morning till four in the evening.
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 way of living gives an individual adequate time at the office and home, promoting both personal and professional lives.
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, they have strictly prohibited smoking in public places and they regularly hike prices of cigars, which discourages people to consume them and improve their overall health. In conclusion, it is quite clear that allowing government to choose a lifestyle of their countrymen can bring fruitful results for both citizens and nations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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