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In many countries in the world, some people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for the country. Others think that the government should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
 many consider that having an extra high income benefit the country, others still think that governments should allow pays only to a certain
limit
. In my view, I believe that salaries should not be set above a specific level as it helps the individuals to combat inequality and bring harmony to the society On the one hand, extremely high wages are good for the nation as it marks its progress especially with the population’s career performance. Businessmen,
for instance
, are mostly the people who are enjoying these benefits as their salaries depend on their companies. In expanding their businesses, locally or internationally, they don't only make more money, but the number of jobs they offer to people increases as well. Having more people,
therefore
, with huge earnings, is a good indicator of a country’s fast economic growth.
On the other hand
, many are suggesting that governments should
limit
 these salaries as it promotes equality among the citizens and I agree. In the case of the developing countries, people who get paid a lot,
such
 as politicians, are the only ones improving their living conditions while the poor sectors become poorer.
However
, by having a set
limit
 to incomes, a balanced status quo will be possible as it can stabilize the rankings of the people according to social standards. If
this
 happens, there will be equal and non-judgmental treatment among the people;
hence
,
this
 would bring peace in the society. In conclusion, I am firm that the government should
limit
 high wage payments to people if a country wants to promote equality among individuals and a peaceful society.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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