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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day

#computers #modems #office #workers #work #home #offices
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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their
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 from
home
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instead
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 of working in offices every day. Working from
home
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 should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers. Thanks to advancements in modern technology, people can now
work
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 from anywhere including their homes. In my opinion,
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 is a beneficial trend and it should be encouraged. Working from
home
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 benefits both the employer and the employee. Most employees who
work
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 from their
home
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 use their own equipment for getting the
work
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 done.
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 arrangement benefits the employer because they do not have to invest in costly hardware or furniture. They can
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 save money on rentals and utility bills.
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 operational costs will ultimately increase the profit of the organisation.
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, when organizations allow employees to
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 from
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 at a
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 convenient to them, they can reduce attrition to a great extent. The biggest benefit for employees is the
time
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 savings. On average, employees in large cities spend two to three hours a day for the daily commute. When they
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 from their
home
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, they can
save
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save, this
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time
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 and use it for other activities.
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, they can spend more
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 with their family or pursue a hobby. Studies have shown that employees who get enough
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 for themselves are actually more productive and happier. Working from
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also
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 benefits young women who quit their jobs to take care of their children. Most of them will readily return to
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 if they have the opportunity to
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 flexible hours from their
home
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. To conclude, not only
employees but
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employees, but
 businesses
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 benefit when they allow their workers to
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 from
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. In my opinion, more organizations should realize the benefit of
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 practice and promote it.
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