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The roads in major cities today are often difficult to travel on. What are the causes of this situation ? What is the solution ?

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It is argued that sometimes it is hard for the public to travel on the
roads
 in the cities. The question arises in our mind , why is it so and what actions can we take on it? I completely agree with the idea and will mention the causes and solutions with examples in
this
 essay. Currently, people suffer a lot
while
 using
roads
 for travelling purposes. The reason is, that
roads
 are not in a good state.
While
 in the construction phase,
the
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low quality
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 materials are used, which are not fit for the
rains
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 and heavy vehicles. As road requires proper maintenance. Because of the lack of interest of authorities towards it , we often see huge holes in it, which not only damages the cars but
also
 puts individuals in trouble.
However
,
traffic
 is another reason that contributes to creating
the
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difficulties for
a
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 public. For
this
 most individuals prefer to travel by train or plane.
For instance
, Lahore, a famous city in Pakistan, where
this
 kind of issue is talk of the town. In some areas of Lahore, the
roads
 are in their crucial state. Even
traffic
 issues are
also
 alarming in
this
 particular region of Pakistan. Recently, CM Maryam Nawaz has been seen using the helicopter for travelling for political purposes. It was hard for her to reach in
the
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time for the meetings because of
traffic
.
Moreover
, it is believed that every problem comes with a solution as well. So, in order to overcome
this
 hurdle, government should take
this
 matter seriously. They should make strict laws for the contractors, to use tested and high-quality materials during the making process of
roads
.
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 the maintenance of
roads
 should
also
 be taken care of.
Therefore
, strictly following the
traffic
 rules will
also
 be helpful in making
roads
 faster and the most selected mode for travelling by the public.
Hence
, it is proven that every problem has a solution. If
roads
 are hard to travel
then
 proper action on time by leadership will make the process easier.
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task response
While the essay is quite comprehensive, try to delve deeper into each cause and solution, elaborating further on their impacts and implications.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical connection between sentences and paragraphs to improve the overall flow of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with a defined introduction, body paragraphs providing causes, solutions, and a conclusion.
task response
The arguments are generally clear and supported by relevant examples, which strengthens the overall response to the task.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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