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Thanks to the development of air travel and telecommunication, contacts between different parts of the world have developed To what extent do you agree or disagree

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While many people believe that the human connection is becoming stronger owing to the development of communication technology and
travel
 industry, I think that as well as the benefits,
this
 trend brings problem. On the positive side, the fast rhythm of life requires people to enhance the efficiency of their work,
then
 have more leisure time. With the advance in telecommunications, people can make inquiries by phone
instead
 of travelling long distances. Internet access allows them to perform various and imperative tasks without leaving their offices.
Although
 employees still have to
travel
 every day for meeting business partners and visiting clients in other cities or even countries, modern transport networks reduce the amount of time they have to spend on commutes.
Furthermore
, modern means of transport and communication
also
 imply the expansion of people’s social circle. In the past, people’s relationships were limited by physical factors
such
 as geographical distance and low mobility.
Nevertheless
, one now can
travel
further
 and easier thanks to the development of air
travel
. As the result, people stand more chance to broaden their horizon with cultural diversities and get acquainted with many friends all around the world. One the negative side, telecommunication technology and
travel
 industry are responsible for the upsurge in lifestyle-related problems. Jobs become demanding and require full commitment. Despite the reduction of official working hour, workers actually work longer and even sacrifice their private life. Because fax, emails and other devices are accessible to their colleagues, customers and supervisors at anytime and everywhere, employees have to respond instantly, even when they are having dinner with family and their private room turns into another office apartment. In conclusion, people now enjoy greater well-being, which is reflected in higher quality of work, less
travel
-related stress and close contact with friends
However
, we
also
 have to accept the interruption as an unwanted aspect of convenient communication.
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