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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Write at least 250 words

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Nowadays, some people argue that
work
 and study at the same
time
 can result overwhelmed by the students, obstructing their
time
 for education. In
this
 essay I will explore some of the problems associated with
this
 and suggest some solutions.
Firstly
, one problem with
this
 issue is that some families don't have the necessary resources to provide help for their children and
then
 pay their studies.
As a result
, they're obligated to
work
 an amount of hours to pay their studies. A solution for that could be the support from the government.
However
, not always is possible to have
this
 support,
therefore
, the students they are obligated to find a job.
On the other hand
, study and employment can be possible if the pupil knows how to combine these two.
For instance
, if their assignments suppose a lot of hours of concentration and dedication, the student can always talk with the school and extend their course or vice versa if their
work
 allowed them to reduce the
time
 of
work
 always having in off resources to provide their classes.
In other words
, expanding the
time
 of their studies or reducing the
time
 of
work
, could be less stressful for them. To sum up, study and have a job at the same
time
 can be difficult. Despite the problem of the money, if they need help always can have access to possible help thanks to the government or if they can't forward to
this
 help always they have the possibility to talk with the school or
work
 to extend their program of studies or reduce the amount of hours of
work
.
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