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Watching television is bad for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#television #children
Watching
television
 is what
the young
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the younger
 generation do in their leisure time. Watching
television
 regularly causes health-related problems.
This
 essay will be presenting the details as well as my opinion on the conclusion part. Recently, Children are so addictive to watch
television which
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television, which
 results in eye-related problems. Most children frequently watch
television
 while they are eating a meal or other activities at home, Which create stress on their cornea and at the early stage, pupil starts to wear glasses.
For example
, There was a survey conducted by the University of Toronto regarding people who wear glasses and the result was from 2000 to 2017 approximately 25 percentile of children wear glasses due to hereditary problems
,
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,
65 percentile of children wear because of eye issues caused by frequently watching tv or playing video games on
television
. The habit of watching tv can cause a serious issue like colour blindness.
Furthermore
, Sometimes watching
television
 can create a gap between children and parents or friends. Some shows give false information to the
children which
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children, which
 impact their social life.
For instance
, There was a cartoon broadcasted in Indian tv in the year 2007, which impacted a communication gap between children and their parents. The cartoon was about a child who describes his life without parents and gives more importance to friends.
In other words
,
television
 can create a social gap which can be a huge problem. To sum up, In my opinion, watching
television
 can be very harmful.
However
, if they allowed
watching
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to watch
television
 at a specific time these issues can be solved.
In addition
, watching frequently can cause a serious problem
.
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.
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