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The lifestyle and culture of different countries are becoming similar. Is it a positive development or negative?

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In recent times, the way of
life
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 and the customs of people in different nations are sharing more similarities. Despite the fact that
this
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 trend has negative effects on
tourism
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, I believe that it is a positive
development
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 owing to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 enhancement of global interactions. A commonly cited negative outcome of
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development
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 is the decline in
tourism
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 due to the similarity in people's
culture
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 and lifestyle. Since people in different parts of the world now eat almost the same meals and wear similar clothes, the need to visit other countries so as to experience their customs and
culture
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 has reduced.
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, tourists to Nigeria have declined in recent decades, owing to the fact that they now visit only historical sites and they are less fascinated by the foods and dressing of many Nigerians, which is similar to
their
belonging to them
theirs
.
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, the similar way of
life
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 of many nations
has negatively impaired
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negatively impairs
negatively impaired
 on
tourism
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.
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, a positive effect of the worldwide similarity in lifestyle and
culture
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 is that it
enhances
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will enhance
 interactions among people today. The nationals of various countries now have many things in common,
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 that they can easily communicate with each other, and promote trade.
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, unlike a few decades ago, many Africans are no longer perplexed be the
life
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 of the Europeans and can now comfortably live in Europe. I believe
this
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 is an important
development
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 from sharing the way of
life
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 with people from other parts of the world. In conclusion,
although
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, the similar
culture
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 and lifestyle in many countries has negatively affected
tourism
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, I am of the view that it is a positive
development
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 because it has improved worldwide interactions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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