Some people believe that technology has made people’s lives easier while others think the opposite. Which do you believe and why?

Technology
is key to the growth of today’s modern
world
. In
this
modern
world
technology
is used in various ways
such
as Gadgets like
smart phones
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,
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and computers
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and computers
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and innovations like
automatic
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vacuum
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cleaners
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cleaner
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.
While
it is true that
technology
is making
individuals
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individuals'
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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busier,
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I believe
technology
Is very important in day to day
life
of an individual as
technology
is making
peoples
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people's
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life
easier by giving out more efficiency towards work and
also
allowing one to do better
communication
. It is true that
people
are surrounded by machines which are making their
life
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busier
such
as by making them constantly use social media for responding to messages online or replying to emails and making them learn about new gadgets
such
as the automatic dishwasher.
Nevertheless
,
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technology
is made to help
people
out with their daily tasks and make their busy
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bit
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easier
and
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helping them out with multiple tasks at the same
time
hence
being more efficient.
Few
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years back
people
spent a lot of
time
washing dishes by hand.
However
, with the help of
technology
which takes care of these chores’ individuals will be left
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energy in their hands. A lot of
individuals
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time
is being taken by
communication
as one has to answer multiple messages from different
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in a day, at the same
time
technology
is
also
helping
people
out with their
communication
as it is easier now to communicate with
people
from different
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of the
world
using multiple online social media options made available, most popular being the Email which is used widely around the
world
. In the early days
where
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there was no
technology
, communicating to far
distance
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was only through
letter
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which used to take days to reach but now
technology
is just making
peoples
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people's
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life
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lives
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easier. In conclusion,
technology
helps
people
to be more energy efficient, saves
time
and enables
to
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do
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communication
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more effectively across the
world
.
Therefore
, even though
technology
is making one’s
life
complicated and busy, I truly believe
technology
is helping to ease a common human
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life
.
Hence
,
technology
Is the potential need for
this
modern
world
and will
also
go on to improve
human’s
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life
in a better way in the coming years.

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