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Some expert believe that ia better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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Many experts believe begin learning a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 is better than start that in secondary
school
. In my opinion, early begin learning a foreign
language
 have the benefits for children more than late study because younger children can learn the
language
 quickly. Beginning to study a foreign
language
 in secondary
school
 can save hire
teacher
 cost of primary
school
. If the primary
school
 settles in a rural area and have a few teachers, learning a national
language
 is more important than other languages. Some rural areas in developing countries, money should spend for hiring a national
language
teacher
 more than hire a foreign
language
teacher
 because read and write their national
language
 is necessary for children more. Some primary
school
 in a rural area of Thailand can use less money for the operation, that
school
 has only
teacher
 who can teach Thai
language
 for students,
for example
. Some schools have to save
teacher
 hiring while some
school
 not. A Primary
school
 that have enough budget for operation can start teaching a foreign
language
. Younger children can learn the
language
 quicker and easier, when they are learning a foreign
language
 early they can use these languages fluently. My mother,
for instance
, she studied both Chinese
language
 and Thai
language
 when she was a girl that made she can use these both
language
 fluently. It is better to learn a foreign
language
 as early as they can. In conclusion, start learning a foreign
language
 in secondary
school
 can save education budget, but begin learning a foreign
language
 early is giving children the benefits more.

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