In many parts of the world, there is not enough food for everyone. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, the lack of
food
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is becoming a notable problem in some countries.
This
essay will discuss the main cause of the issues and
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some solutions, before coming to a reasoned conclusion. In many countries, especially in Africa, many
people
are living in
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shortage of
food
.
This
situation comes from both subjective and objective.
Firstly
, weather
changing
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, polluted
environment
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environments
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and new plant
disease
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diseases
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are the basic
cause
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causes
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of lost
season
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seasons
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which lead to the decreasing of
food
amount.
Secondly
, the Governments in some countries do not pay attention to
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their
Agriculture
.
This
makes the
farmers
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life more and more
difficulty
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.
Furthermore
, overpopulation is
also
another burden on
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ration
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ratio
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of each person. As
the
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result, the shortage of
food
grown
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slowly and
people
hardly realize it until the problem has gone so far.
For example
, the population in China
has
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increased so fast many years ago and driven to the situation that
food
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cannot meet the demand
at
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many parts, especially in the countryside.
Therefore
, the Government should take some steps to develop
agriculture
as well as
protecting
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the environment to solve
this
issue. First and foremost,
people
should
be rise
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their awareness of global warming, which has affected a lot of the climate.
Moreover
, renovating soil and water, which are damaged by pollution should be
seriously
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attention.
On the other hand
, the Government should enact new
law
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laws
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to
assure
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the
farmer
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farmer's
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life
as well as
figure out
the
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suitable method to promote
the
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agriculture
. For
instant
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, Israel grows
plan
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plans
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that suit with desert climate and bring a
lot
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economic value.
This
policy helps Israel
becoming
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the strongest
Agriculture
in the world. In conclusion, famine is happening in many places
in
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all over the world because of many grounds.
However
,
this
problem can be solved if their governments find out an improved policy and
people
pay more attention to
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their environment.
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