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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing to day. What are the causes of global warming and measur can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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These
days many
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days, many
 families move abroad for work. Some people believe that
this
 benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. A
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Recent Trend shows a lot of families prefer to settle abroad for better work opportunities. While it is believed by some that the
next
 generation reaps the benefits of
abroad
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a broad
 settlement others argue that it is not worth the hardship that an immigrant family goes through. Both views will be discussed below. People tend to move to
first
 world countries not only because it offers them higher pay packages and greater career opportunities, but
also
 it gives them good social benefits.
This
 is particularly important for the kids as these countries like Canada and Australia gives free medical service and schooling while it cost a hefty in countries like India.
Also
, these countries give subsidy and allowance to parents to raise the kids properly.
Moreover
, children enjoy pollution free environment as the population is less. Pupils
also
 get benefitted from better chance of
pursing
following in order to overtake or capture or as accompaniment to such pursuit
pursuing
 higher education from foreign countries.
On the other hand
, there is a strong notion that these families
initially
 have to struggle a lot to get settled in abroad due to initial joblessness and very high cost of living. While parents struggle to find a job for a long time and eventually run out of savings, kids
also
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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