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Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

Some people think that the things that truly matter in
life
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 are free or cannot be bought with
money
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. I completely agree with
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 view.
Money
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 can only buy material comforts. While these are
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 important in
life
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, in my opinion, they are not the most important things. I have seen many poor people who lead happy and content lives in spite of their poverty. I have
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 seen many rich people who lead miserable lives in spite of having all the
money
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 in the world. If
money
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 could buy happiness, the rich must be the happiest in the world. The reality,
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, is different. In my opinion, the most important things in
life
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 are love and friendship and neither can be bought with
money
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. Parents’ love,
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, is the biggest gift a person receives in their lifetime and it is free. You may be the poorest person in the
world but
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world, but
 that will not stop your parents from loving you. Relationships with our family and friends are actually the things that keep us going and they are free. Just because you are poor it does not mean that you cannot be in a meaningful relationship. In fact, if you have a nice character and a kind personality, you will have no dearth of friends.
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, a rich person with an arrogant personality and a bossy attitude may be lonely in
life
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 because no one wants to be with them. To conclude, while it is true that
money
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 can buy many things, truly important things in
life
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 like love and relationships are actually free and cannot be bought.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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