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Both poor and rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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Attaining a
university
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 degree is always challenging for
both
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 needy and affluent students. While it is equally difficult for
both
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 the segments to get admission
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into
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 the
university
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, I believe wealthy students face lesser difficulty when it comes to paying for the costs involved. The most common reason for students facing difficulty in
university
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 admission is the limitation of seats, and outperforming the competition is equally tough for
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 needy and wealthy students. Take Bangladesh,
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,
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 year there were more than a hundred applicants against each seat in all of its top-ranking public universities.
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, no matter how hard students worked, some students, either poor or rich, were left out of
university
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 programs. Another reason preventing students attaining tertiary education is high tuition fees.
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 students from affluent families may not face any difficulty, many needy families cannot afford the cost. A significant portion of poor students opts out from study owing to
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 obstructive
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 fees.
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, from a financial perspective, poor students have to deal with more hurdles to access
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 education.
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, when opportunities within one’s country are limited, affluent students might go
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to
 study abroad.
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, the cost of living and studying abroad is beyond the reach of underprivileged families, and for them, no
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 option exists. To conclude, while accessibility to a
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 degree is tough for students from
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 poor or wealthy families, needy students find it more difficult because of the high costs of study and they are
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 offered with fewer opportunities.

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