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Lifestyle and culture of different countries are becoming similar. Is it a positive development or negative?

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Advancements in communication technology have made the entire world a global village where information travels from one corner to another in the blink of an eye. Due to
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this, information
 symmetry and accessibility, the world is becoming increasingly similar. Some people argue that
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 is a negative development. While I do not quite consider
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 as totally negative, in my opinion, there is definitely a need to preserve
diversity
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. The
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 and foremost reason to oppose the tendency of countries to become similar is that it will lead to the loss of indigenous
culture
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, traditions, customs and lifestyles. These lifestyles and
culture
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 were developed several millennia ago and suit the specific
country
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. So, adopting another
country
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’s lifestyles and
culture
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 might not be suitable for people living in that
country
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.
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, in a
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 like India, it is better to eat vegetarian food and wear cotton clothes because the climate is hot.
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, it is unsustainable if people living everywhere follow the same lifestyle.
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, the per capita consumption of fossil fuels in the USA is 20 times higher than the per capita consumption of the same fuel in a developing
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. If people everywhere start using the same amount of energy, we will soon run out of its supply. Another reason for nurturing
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 is that
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 enhances innovation. Different
culture
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 and lifestyles provide one a different perspective on life.
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, many schools and colleges prefer to increase
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 in their classroom to enrich the learning experience. In the past, many pharmaceutical research teams in the USA attributed their success to essential inputs brought in by teammates of different nationality.
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, by adopting similarity, one can protect oneself from discrimination based on race, nationality or style of clothing.
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, similarity enhances acceptance. It
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 makes life
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easier, especially
 when people travel abroad. In conclusion, considering the aforementioned views, in my opinion, it is crucial to protect
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 of different countries but at the same time there is no harm in imbibing the best practices of other countries. Do you have an essay on
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