Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on the society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A myriad of individuals deem that celebrities are worthy to be paid a huge amount of money, while
other
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others
think that they are not well deserve all
this
money
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I am convinced that there are priorities to be done,
thus
authorities should shift their
priority
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priorities
to essential tasks rather than complimentary tasks
such
as entertainment jobs.
This
essay will investigate the both view and their causes. For one view, there is a negative impact of entertainment
on
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in
the country, which includes financial burden and superficial minds
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Entertainment professions tend to be fund draining professions,
although
we really need for financial support to improve many primary sectors
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the authorized persons squander the national's budget for unnecessary issues.
Moreover
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level
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the level
levels
of
publics
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public
' awareness is declining
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because of imitation of negative sides of artists. Egypt has become top leading country
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which has the largest rate of hepatitis C virus and cancer.
This
is explained that entertaining fields should be no longer existed with
nearly evanescence
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the nearly evanescence
of backbone services, that are absolutely vital for any human being
such
as health and education. Another view, a lot of public figures merit large quantities of money, due to the influential role that they are doing in
positive representing
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positive, representing
our historical greatness, culture identity and supporting poor and needy people. As far as I recall there are many of actors immortalize the historical memories through movies, documentaries and series
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therefore
these works are a symbol of Eastern civilization.
In addition
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there are some celebrities who participate in several charitable affairs and took part in caring for marginalized classes
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For example
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Angelina Jolie has taken part in rescuing
enormous number
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an enormous number
of refugees in several areas around the world. In light of
this
, it will be excluded that public figures have a massive role in
improvement
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improving
and sacrificing more than they earned. To recapitulate
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there are negatives and positives of providing a lot of wages for artists
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however
nation may in need for the majority of
budget
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the budget
in reforms
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As far as I know there is no nation make the
first
priority
such
as complimentary works and it can have its own
renaissance
the revival of learning and culture
Renaissance
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Finally
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I may recommend that high priority issues should acquire the entire concern until the desired stability achieved
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