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Some people believe that the public health will be worse in the future than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 disagree with the written
statment
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
. I believe that most of the people in the world have more information about their
health
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 and
also
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 about how they can improve their
healthy
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health
 conditions. Nowadays, information about how harmful is to smoke for our bodies can be seen in many packets of cigars.
This
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 is a clear example how things can change from our recent past. There is a clear trend in the diminishing of smokers and if
this
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 continues it will have a positive impact
in
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on
 our
health
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.
On the other hand
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, the
alimentation
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alimentary
habbits
an established custom
habits
 are changing all over the world and
this
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 can affect people’s
health
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.
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However every one
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However, everyone
However everyone
 can choose what to eat every day. Mostly everybody, from developed societies,
know
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knows
 the importance of having a healthy diet. Advances
such
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 as the information showed in the menus of fast food restaurants will help people to have a clever choice before they choose what to eat. Another important issue that I would like to mention is how medicine is changing. There are new
discovers
the act of discovering something
discoveries
 and treatments almost every week and
that is
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 an
inequivoque
admitting of no doubt or misunderstanding; having only one meaning or interpretation and leading to only one conclusion
unequivocal
sintom
(medicine) any sensation or change in bodily function that is experienced by a patient and is associated with a particular disease
symptom
 of how things are changing in order to improve the world’s
health
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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