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Some people believe that the public health will be worse in the future than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #health #future
I
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 disagree with the written
statment
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
. I believe that most of the people in the world have more information about their
health
 and
also
 about how they can improve their
healthy
Suggestion
health
 conditions. Nowadays, information about how harmful is to smoke for our bodies can be seen in many packets of cigars.
This
 is a clear example how things can change from our recent past. There is a clear trend in the diminishing of smokers and if
this
 continues it will have a positive impact
in
Suggestion
on
 our
health
.
On the other hand
, the
alimentation
Suggestion
alimentary
habbits
an established custom
habits
 are changing all over the world and
this
 can affect people’s
health
.
However every one
Accept comma addition
However, everyone
However everyone
 can choose what to eat every day. Mostly everybody, from developed societies,
know
Suggestion
knows
 the importance of having a healthy diet. Advances
such
 as the information showed in the menus of fast food restaurants will help people to have a clever choice before they choose what to eat. Another important issue that I would like to mention is how medicine is changing. There are new
discovers
the act of discovering something
discoveries
 and treatments almost every week and
that is
 an
inequivoque
admitting of no doubt or misunderstanding; having only one meaning or interpretation and leading to only one conclusion
unequivocal
sintom
(medicine) any sensation or change in bodily function that is experienced by a patient and is associated with a particular disease
symptom
 of how things are changing in order to improve the world’s
health
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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