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Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence whilst others think that intelligent can be measured in other ways What is your opinion?

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It is often thought that
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 indicates the
intelligence
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 of a
person
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, others believe that
intelligence
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 can be tested through other methods. In my opinion,
success
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 is not the indicator of
intelligence
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. There are other factors which can lead to
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success
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success, such
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 as the ability to cope with challenges and to learn from mistakes. It is often seen that resilient people tend to be more successful whether they are intelligent or not.
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 is because
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 people adapt to different circumstances. Even if they fail, they bounce back and eventually succeed.
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, 90% of successful entrepreneurs who participated in a recent survey in London said that they achieved their
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 by being adaptable. Another factor that determines the
success
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 of an individual is his hard
work
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 and determination. Successful people are often diligent and consistent in their efforts.
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, scientists owe their discoveries to their hard
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. If scientists did not make constant efforts, they would not come up with achievements. As for measuring the
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 of a
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, various tests are available. Formal exams in schools and IQ tests help determine the
intelligence
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 level of a
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. It is not necessary that those who perform better
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 these tests tend to be successful in their careers.
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, many top performing outstanding students of medical schools do not necessarily turn out to be successful doctors in medical practice. In conclusion,
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success
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the success
 of a
person
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 is the indicator of his hard
work
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 and resilience and not
intelligence
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. In my opinion, being intelligent is not sufficient to be successful. It is the combination of a number of factors
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 as hard
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,
determination and
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determination, and
 diligence that lead to
success
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