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Both the poor and rick find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#rick #accessibility #university
It is not easy to get
admit
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admitted
 in universities these
days irrespective
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days, irrespective
 of their caste or creed. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 and believe that universities have more stringent rules in terms of choosing students depending upon their academic performances and skills. It has become difficult to get an admission
in
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into
 tertiary education.
Firstly
, in order to get admitted, students have to go through a proper process which involves overall screening of their performance.
For example
, entrance exams, job experience and interviews. Accessibility to
third
-level education do not depend on the excessive fees or easy financial access by
elite class
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an elite class
the elite class
 like before. For
instances
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instance
, donations to universities.
Secondly
, seeing the talent, skills and educational performances
of
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for
 underprivileged and rich children, many universities have opened the door which involves a less fees and strict process to get qualified.
Additionally
, offering admissions to excellent and well- deserving students not only provide a better future to
students but
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students, but
also
 a
goodwill
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good will
 to the Universities.
Subsequently
, most universities have raised their bar in terms of giving admissions to students.
Furthermore
, many universities are granting more scholarships to deserving students on
basis
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the basis
 of their academic records, skills and intellectual ability.
For instance
, universities in
UK
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the UK
 are providing 30% more scholarships than before to international students. In conclusion, allowance to universities are no longer easy these days and to get selected to top universities, students have to go through an admission process involving oral or written exam.
Therefore
, it’s no longer depending on
status
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the status
 of the
people but
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people, but
 the educational qualification of students.

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