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Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists? Do you agree or disagree? Support with reasons and examples from your own experience

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It is believed by some folks that Entertainers
play
Suggestion
will play
 a vital role in today’s life than the Scientists.
Although
, Entertainment has become a necessity in today’s life, yet I don’t think Entertainers contributes much to society as compared with Scientist so in my opinion Scientist play crucial role in the development of a country. Admittedly, entertainment is very much important to relax our mind and rejuvenate ourselves daily for
next
 day activities.
Firstly
, it helps Adult to forget all day hurdles and feel relaxed to some extent.These days different people use different sources to entertain themselves, many young children love to do outdoor activities while kids love in-house games,
for instance
,
Accept space
,
toddlers get pleasure by playing with various musical toys, adult watch TV programs or watch movies in PVR.
Secondly
, it helps in creating the employment as
this
 industry has grown too much in recent time.
Nevertheless
, Science and technology
is
Suggestion
are
 one thing which
can not
can not
cannot
 even compare with entertainment.Any country can not be developed if it does not promote research and encourage scientist to innovate new things. In conclusion, having entertainers around or using any entertainment medium is good, but science is our necessity.

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