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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

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It is common that nowadays old people are left in the outskirt while their descendants fledged into a metropolis for better opportunities.
Although
 there are undoubtedly several factors behind
this
 trend, societies can take steps to solve
this
 dilemma.
First
, the main culprits behind
this
 alarming situation are work related demand and the lure of a more convenient life. The majority of big companies are city-based
hence
 youngsters have to relocate close to central business district for a leaner logistics because a daily routine from suburb to downtown and vice versa is exhausted and stressful. As a matter of fact, living in the city obviously has more advantages than in terms of convenience.
For instance
, there are more schools and hospital available to choose to compare to rural area. Indeed, the needs of young people residing in downtown are solid and understandable.
On the other hand
, we can mitigate
this
 problem by some certain measures. Government has to seriously address
this
 identified issue and gives solutions to deconcentrate population.
In particular
, authorities can reward firms who are willing to station in the countryside via tax recession scheme. At the same time, more elderly care programs have to be in place, especially in areas that ratio one senior citizen per population is high. By a balanced planning between city and rural areas, mostly decentralize people density with rewarding system I believe we can bring back more young people home. In conclusion, various approaches can be taken to tackle the problem that are certain to arise as more young people taking their bets into downtown leaving their legacy generation at the countryside.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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