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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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The field of agriculture has witnessed several improvements, but quite a number of people in various countries of the world still experience
hunger
.
This
 is majorly
as a result
 of climate change, and lack of funds to procure resilient crop varieties,
storage
 and
transport
 facilities. Solutions exist for these problems that have been identified.
Firstly
, a major reason for
hunger
 in some countries is the problem of climate change. With
increasing release
Suggestion
the increasing release
 of greenhouse gases into the atmosphere, and its attendant global warming, several regions are experiencing extremes of weather conditions
such
 as floods, droughts, and storms.
This
 results in a shift in the ecological system, increasing the occurrence of different diseases, and
a s
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
result
Suggestion
a result
, the growth and survival of different plants and
animals
Suggestion
animal
 species cannot be supported by these weather changes.
Consequently
, less food is available for residents in
such
 regions.
Furthermore
, the lack of funds to procure high
yield pest
Accept comma addition
yield, pest
 resistant seeds,
storage
 and
transport
 facilities contribute significantly to the famine experienced in some countries.
In other words
, the seeds available for cultivation are easily destroyed by pests. While some of these seeds can be salvaged through storing, inadequate
storage
 facilities will result in spoilage.
Also
, lack of
transport
 facilities from farms to consumers, including good roads, rails, and/or vehicles
also
 increases the risks of
hunger
.
However
, there are several measures that can be taken to tackle these issues.
To begin
 with, the government should invest in improved farming methods that bypass the effects of climate change.
For instance
,
this
 can be in the form of using greenhouses for planting.
Additionally
, funds should be budgeted for purchasing high quality seeds,
storage
 equipment, and on
improved
Suggestion
the improved transport system
transport
 system. In conclusion,
although
hunger
 is a menace in some nations of the world, the government's provision of funds and investment in advanced farming methods will help combat
this
 issue.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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