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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Ensuring
adequate
Suggestion
an adequate food
food
 for the entire population has been a major concern for nations throughout the centuries. Some people believe that
government
 should focus on producing all kinds of
food
 while importing as less as possible to ensure buying capabilities of all citizens. I firmly believe that producing many kinds of
food
 is an inevitable effort in terms of ensuring nation’s
food
 security.
Firstly
, the more a country relies on imported
food
, the more
food
 crisis it faces.
Food
 import includes transportation costs, taxation and other charges that eventually increase the
food
 price. To tackle
this
 problem, a
government
 should allocate more budgets to improve national
production
 by maximising the collaboration of university and research laboratory.
Consequently
,
this
 idea can create more talented individuals who would be involved in domestic
food
production
.
Furthermore
, by mass
production
 of all kinds of
food
 items, a country can prepare for the rainy days.
Secondly
, by focusing on farming, irrigation and planting, a
government
 can decrease unemployment problems.
For example
, in Indonesia, farming sector creates the highest percentage of jobs. More than 50 percent Indonesian are directly or indirectly depends on the agriculture sector.
Finally
, imported
food
 does not have the quality and freshness that locally produced one can offer. If
food
 is imported from a long distance, the
food
 value degrades and in some cases, toxic chemicals are used to preserve the
food
.
Thus
 the local
production
 of foods would ensure better
food
 quality and sound health of citizens. In conclusion, preventing the
food
 crisis, ensuring better
food
 quality and decreasing unemployment issues could implement if a country becomes self-sufficient
on
Suggestion
in
 their
food
production
. Massively producing all
kind
Suggestion
kinds
 of foods is a great effort which
government
 could decide and take advantages of.
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