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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Family structure plays a vital role to form a society, but from the past few decades, it is noticed that family structures have changed from joint to nuclear family
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 and
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 change has its own pros and cones. I believe that the benefits of these changes are less than its drawbacks. A joint family
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 strengthens social and moral ethics, which are the basic pillars to form a strong nation. The joint family
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 teaches its young generation, how
to help
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helping
 others and make a strong bond with other family members by helping them in their tough time.
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, the whole family act as a team to tackle any problem.
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, the young generation trained in
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 environment act as a family to solve the problem when their country faces any kind of issue. The joint family
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 helps the financially weak family member, who later on can be an earning hand of the family. When all the family members earn
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 the financial status of the whole family starts increasing gradually.
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, most of the families
in Pakistan lived
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lived in Pakistan
 in
joint family structure
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the joint family structure
a joint family structure
, where three generations (grandparent to grandsons) are living in the same house and earning is the responsibility of all male family members. They all share their financial issues with each other and everyone contributes their share to solve that issue.
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, a financially weak family member becomes able to tackle the problem. In conclusion, the nuclear family
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 provides privacy
to
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for
 a family, but its members have to pay its price. They have to handle financial and social problems by themselves.
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, members of the joint family
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 stand by the side of each other in every situation.
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, the joint family
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 outweighs the nuclear family structure.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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