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Tourism is an ever growing industry What benefits do you think tourism brings to individuals and society?

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An Industry that has been known for its continuous growth is Tourism. Encouraging people to visit an area by the dwellers is always a step in the right direction.
This
 is because, it brings so many good things to the individuals and the community at large. The essay below will shine more light on some of the gains.
Firstly
, travelling to new places brings some sort of education to a person. It exposes someone to a different environment with unfamiliar cultures, weather, people, food and so many other things, and these bring about learning new stuff from the experiences.
For instance
, my mother learnt a new recipe for making rice from her trip to China
last
 year, and that made her so happy that she made it for everyone on Christmas eve. That delicious meal would not have been a reality if she had not gone for the visit. More so, good economy is something every community will always rejoice over. Tourism has been known for its boost to any economy. When more people migrate to a place, it creates a need for a growth in the development.
This
 will increase other aspects
such
 as accomodation and food business.
Therefore
, there will be more jobs which will increase the employment rate of the society. An example is Kenya in Africa
that is
 now one of the richest nations in the Continent because of its interesting tourist attractions. In conclusion, increasing rate at which humans move from one place to another to see new things, has some positive effects on both the people and the community.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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