In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?
In many
countries
, you can find easy products
from another country in a supermarket, I believe this
because it makes many people try new experiences and new habits
from other countries
. It should be seen as a positive development because the popularity of food
products
can increase export salaries
.
Nowadays, the availability of international food
products
can be easy to access in any supermarket. No matter what the products
where are from the products
, they are easy to find in another region. For instance
, the availability of fruits
in Indonesia
which are not plants in Indonesia
such
as blueberries, raspberries, and other fruits
. This
food
can grow in Europe, and now can easily to accessed in any supermarket in Indonesia
. This
is not can only make it easy for citizens in Indonesia
to try new experiences but also
promote healthy habits
.
I think this
is a positive development, this
experience can allow many people all over the world to try cultural exchange and understand new habits
from other countries
. Additionally
, increasing the consumption of fruits
can increase the popularity of food
products
, which can provide to promote import or expand salaries
. Also
, Indonesia
can export their tropical fruits
to other countries
where there unavailable. For example
, Mangos and coconut can not grow in subtropical countries
which can result in high salaries
.
In conclusion, emphasizing the newness of their meal products
in advertising is an effective way for other people to try new healthy habits
and experiences. This
is a positive development because the popularity is able to support the salaries
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